Rewind #FridayFictioneers

Rewind #FridayFictioneers

Jim drove on ignoring the thumbs.  Get your own car, he thought.  He  saw her while changing the radio channel.  Pretty girl in blue asking for a lift.  He stopped the car.

Her car broke down she said and rambled about some meeting to attend.  Jim just stared back.  She reminded him a lot of his ex-wife.  He opened the car door.  She got in and continued grumbling about her car.

Shut up, he thought.  But she didn’t.  Just like his ex-wife.  He felt the heat rising to his face.  His right hand itched.

He regretted it later.

Here is my story for Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle. The photo was contributed by Kent Bonham.

Writing also for #WritingWednesdays from Write Tribe.  

24 thoughts on “Rewind #FridayFictioneers

  1. Good story! Jim is a ticking time bomb waiting for his opportunity to shut her up permanently – probably what he did to his ex-wife. Obviously, “pretty in blue” talks too much and can’t read his violent temper. She has probably always been an annoying “Chatty Cathy.” Really good intrigue! Nan

    1. Thanks Nan. You have captured the story essence very well. I wanted to convey the same.

  2. Ooh I like that story. You’ve shown things really well – ‘right hand itched’ , ‘heat rising to his face’. Nicely done!

    1. Thanks Iain. Normally people blame the victim and say, ‘she shouldn’t have asked for a lift.’

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